I’m not sure what this would be called,
but my kids encouraged me to post it,
and my daughter, especially, liked it.
It’s a fun one, so I hope you enjoy it~
He: You’re easy on the eyes
She: I have to say likewise
He: Can I have your number?
She: Only if you’ll remember
He: Will you go out with me tomorrow night?
She: It would be a delight
He: The night was amazing
She: You have my heart racing
He: Can I kiss you goodnight?
She: I was hoping you might
He: Can I see you again?
She: I’d like that. When?
He: How about us together?
She: I’m thinking forever
Lauren Scott © 2012
Copyright 2012
Baydreamer ~ Lauren Scott 
what a beauty such a delightful read totally with your daughter on this one 🙂
Thanks, Soma, it was fun and glad you liked it. I wasn’t sure about posting it! 🙂
In a contemporary ‘texting’ kind of way, this is kind of romantic … hehehe. I like it! ~ Julie 🙂
Thanks for your insight, Julie, I didn’t even think of texting, but that sure fits! I’m glad you liked it, because I wasn’t sure about it… 🙂
I liked this one Lauren, it really is cute! 🙂 Your daughter sure has a good sense of what’s good. 🙂
Thanks, Gabby, and I’ll tell her! She’s a romantic, like me! Oh, to be young again, too! xx
I love it Lauren! 🙂
Thanks, PJ, I’m glad you liked it! 🙂
Really it was fun and good……:)
Thanks so much; I’m glad you enjoyed this! 🙂
Oh Lauren, this is SO wonderful–wish I’d written it!! It’s a “couplet” in more than just poetic form!! Really, I can’t get over how fun and romantic it is–you two are so blessed!!
Thanks so much, Caddo, It was a case of spontaneity and I wasn’t sure about sharing it! But, your comment makes me happy! 🙂 xx
What a wonderful flow this has to it. Can’t help but smile reading this 🙂
Thanks and I’m glad I made you smile! 🙂
awwwwwwwwwww thats so cute………..
Thank you! 🙂 xx
I thought the girl was playing hard-to-get at first but I’m glad she came through in the end! Ha ha! 😉
I’m glad she came through, too! He sounded too good to be true! 🙂
Thanks, Nisha! xx
Romantic and funny!
Thank you! 🙂
Lovely. Thanks Lauren, gave me a smile.
Thanks, Joe, I’m happy to make you smile, too! 🙂
Reminds me of my mum and dad.
Really nice poem. 🙂
Awww…what a nice memory then, thank you, Sanah~
Cute and sweet – we should all be so lucky to have such a love!
Thank you so much! 🙂
It is lovely to see real love playing out is real life! 🙂
Thanks, Sharon, I honestly didn’t think this was worthy of posting…I’m surprised and happy with the outcome~ 🙂
Yes, very good! I did enjoy it.
Thanks, David, with your talent, I always appreciate your feedback~
Very cute! 🙂
Thanks, Celeste! 🙂
I like it! Having a conversation within a poem is a neat idea, thanks for sharing.
Thanks, Christy, I’ve never written a poem in this style and I almost didn’t post it. Glad I did, though! 🙂
Adorable!! Tell your kids I said thanks for making you post it 😉
Andrea
Thanks, Andrea, I will and I’m glad you liked it! 🙂
I’m glad you took your daughter’s advice and posted this…It’s lovely, Lauren!
Hugs, xx
Thanks, Deb, it’s funny how I almost didn’t think this was “good enough” to post, but I’m happy many have enjoyed it! Hugs to you today…xx
Say hi to your daughter for me, nice piece of writing that is, thank you! So smoothly flowing..,
Thanks so much, Willow! I will convey your message to my daughter! I’m so glad you enjoyed this…
….. :-), simply love it…
Gabby and I nominated you for the ABC award, Congrats! Check out our blog for what you should do. hugs, Gabby and Autumn
Thanks so much to both of you! If you can give me a little time to follow through, that would be wonderful. And thanks again for thinking of me! Hugs back to both of you! xx
🙂 I like it!!!
Thanks, BG, I wasn’t going to post this…but glad I did! 🙂
it’s sooooooo cute!
❤
Thanks, Nanda! 🙂
fantastic – love the way she starts of coy and comes round in the end – great performance piece – could I use this as part of a poetry seminar on relatioships – crediting you and referencing your blog?
Thank you so much and of course, I’d be honored…would it be on video or live? If on video, I’d love to have the opportunity of viewing your performance…thanks, again!
It’s on February 26th in istanbul -its an elt conference about rhythm, chants, poems for an audience of english teachers – usually 5-6 hundred – live but they do video it so I’ll try and get copy. thanks very much. there are two of us so that’s why I liked the dialogue aspect of this poem and as our theme I wanted to do it around the rhythm of life with particular reference to the nature of relationships so I’ve got some stories from nasreddin hoca, some folk tales and some poems – and your’s would be great as part of an introduction – thanks again, take care
Hehe, a creative and sweet little work, Lauren! I am glad you posted it. It came packaged with smiles and hugs, and I am always glad for those 🙂
Thanks, VW, I’m glad I posted it, too, but I really didn’t think it was “good enough.” At least it was good for a smile~ 🙂
Beautiful write. Yes, the fairer sex do tend to add beauty, class and truth to everything. 🙂
Peace & grace,
~Miro
Thanks, Miro, this one almost ended up in the “round file” but I’m glad I decided to share it, with a little help from my kids! 🙂
really cool!
Thanks so much!
Love it.
The last line is so beautiful…
Thank you; I’m glad you liked it, as I almost tossed it! 🙂
Love it! 🙂
Thank you so much! 🙂
Delightful! – Thank you for sharing!
Thank you and I appreciate your visit!
Lauren, you of the pure, loving heart always. You are the daughter my mother wish I was when at the age of this “flirting forever” poem. This poem is fun and yet wistfully reminding us of such innocent days! Bless you. We love you for keeping blogland so lovely and tender and hopeful a place.
Thank you always, Rose, for your, oh, so lovely, comments that I do look forward to…and to think this one was almost on it’s way to the shredder! 🙂
This makes me wish ……’awwwww’.
Loved it!
Thank you, Arch, as I’ve mentioned in above comments, this one almost landed in the trash! 🙂
So lovely Lauren! I’m glad your daughter convinced you to post it up for us! 😀
Thanks so much, Eve, coming from you, that means a lot…and to think I almost tossed it! 🙂
Very sweet. Feels like a retro 50s movie script. 🙂
Thanks, Holly, it does, doesn’t it? Thanks for your perspective! I almost trashed it before my kids told me to post it! 🙂
So playful and creative at the same time! It put a smile on my lips 🙂
Thanks, PG! It almost ended up in the “round” file! 🙂
Oh, this is so refreshing, thank you!!! 🙂
Thank you for stopping by! 🙂
I like it. I wrote something similar and shared it with my writer’s group, but they weren’t as progressive and you and your readers.
Thanks, Sandy! I’m sorry to reply years later. Somehow yours and a few other comments got missed. But I always appreciate your feedback! Have a great Monday!
This is cute and reminds me of my husband and I when we started dating.
Thanks so much, PS, and I’m so sorry for missing this! I’m glad, though, that this is like you and your hubby. That makes me smile! Happy Monday!
Yw LS 🙂 Happy Monday to you as well!
If I’d written this I would be quite happy with it. It seems to have been pretty well received too.I love the slightly mocking use of rhyme; it works brilliantly and successfully achieved. 😀
Coming from you, Ben, this is a great complement! How I missed your comment two years ago is beyond me and I’m so sorry! But I always love your feedback! Have a great start to your week! 🙂
No worries. Have a good week yourself. 🙂
i love your poetry.
Thanks so much, I appreciate your kind words~
The pick of Ben Naga’s Newly Discovered Beauties for February 2012.
http://bennaga.wordpress.com/the-pick-of-this-months-newly-discovered-poems/#comment-2247
Thanks so much, Ben, for including me on your list. I’m truly honored! 🙂
What a fun poem!
Thanks, Thomas!